Category: Script Previews

Glamorous (The CW) pilot preview: The gayest non-Ryan Murphy show EVER!

SERIES TITLE: Glamorous
NETWORK: The CW
GENRE: Dramedy

LOGLINE: a gender non-conforming recent high school graduate lands the gig of a lifetime interning at a cosmetics company whose products he panned on YouTube, at the side of its founder and CEO, Madolyn. But not everyone is happy to have ab fab Marco Mejia there, and they are doing everything they can to take him down. On his own for the first time, this is Marco’s chance to live, love and grow to understand what it really means to be queer…

Pilot Cast: Ben J. Pierce (Fuller House, Guidance), Brooke Shields (Suddenly Susan, Lipstick Jungle, The Middle), Pierson Fodé (The Bold and the Beautiful, Jessie), Jade Payton (iZombie)
Series Creator: Jordon Nardino (Star Trek Discovery, Quantico, Smash, GCB). 
Pilot Director: Eva Longoria (Devious Maids, Blackish)
Producers: Jordon Nardino, Michael Rauch (Royal Pains, Instinct), Damon Wayans Jr. (Happy Together) & Kameron Tarlow (Hot In Cleveland).

Studios: CBS Television Studios & Two Shakes.

Ever wonder how TV executives wade through the dozens of pilot scripts they’re pitched each year? They have staff script readers, who provide what’s called “Script Coverage,” an executive summary and a recommendation for each script. Now you too can preview some of the season’s most buzzed about pilots and find out whether we’d recommend them for pickup. Note that all opinions are our own, and all plot, casting and other creative details described here are subject to change.

 

   

You’ll Like It If You Already Like: The Carrie Diaries, The Bold Type, Insatiable, Ugly Betty, Pose, Ru Paul’s Drag Race…

Likely Timeslot: Who cares, as long as Netflix gets the international rights and US first window rights? But pairing it with Dynasty on fridays would probably make sense.

 

WRITTEN BY: Jordon Nardino

PAGECOUNT: 60 pages

DRAFT: Network draft 1/10/19

BACKGROUND: The CW has ordered two very inclusive pilots this year: DC’s Batwoman, which would be the first superhero series led by an openly gay character (and actress, Ruby Rose), and Glamorous, which would be the first series led by a gender non-conforming character (and openly gay actor Ben J. Pierce).

The first sale from Damon Wayans Jr’s newly launched company Two Shakes, Glamorous would appear to be very much in line with Wayan’s stated goal of developing projects that focus on characters who aren’t usually at the center of series. It’s an admirable move for Wayans, who recently apologized for a series of anti-LGBT remarks made earlier in his career, pledging to dedicate himself personally and professionally to righting his past wrongs. Also attached to the project is Eva Longoria, who will be directing the pilot — a first for her, as well. Having a latinx woman doing it makes a lot of sense. 

 

SCRIPT SYNOPSIS:  MARCO MEJIA (18) is a gender-fluid aspiring beauty influencer and soontobe high school graduate. Born to stand out but lacking the following to make his mark on the beauty scene, Marco posts a scathing review online for a Glamorous Cosmetics product. When Marco’s review catches the eye of aging glamazon turned Glamorous Cosmetics CEO MADOLYN ADDISON (50), she arrives on graduation day with a proposition. She offers him an internship at Glamorous headquarters in Manhattan, and a chance to help improve the brand from the inside. His mother JULIA (40s) is not really happy with this but lets him seize this opportunity. On his first day at Glamorous, Marco realizes he isn’t the only one up for the job and finds himself competing against popular influencers like ALISSASAYS (19) and NOWHERE (16) in a cutthroat competition for the coveted internship. After impressing Madolyn and securing the internship, Marco finds himself caught between newfound friends like VENETIA (20), Madolyn’s assistant, and enemies like CHAD (25), Madolyn’s son, and on the path to selfdiscovery in the city where dreams are made of…

COMMENTS:First, for those not already in the know, a primer on just what gender nonconforming” means. It’s used to describe a person whose behavior or appearance does not conform to prevailing cultural and social expectations about what is appropriate for their gender. Here, Marco is an ambitious and creative latinx gender-nonconforming teenager who uses makeup and fashion to let his queer self bloom. He is a he, not a she, and that’s important. He’s gay but he’s not transgender. And he lives in a world where that’s not a problem. Not once in this script is there a moment when somebody mocks him for who he is, how he acts, or what he wears. That may not seem realistic and perhaps the writers will tackle homophobia later on, but that’s not what the pilot is about and quite frankly it’s refreshing.

Marco is an incredible, groundbreaking character whose struggles are universal. Like The CW’s critically-acclaimed Jane The Virgin and Crazy Ex-Girlfriend, the show has the potential to add something new to the television landscape and to our shared cultural conversation. Unlike Netflix’s Insatiable (which was also originally a CW pilot), Glamorous doesn’t try to be controversial for the sake of controversy, handling its subject matter instead with care and sensitivity.

While this isn’t a Ryan Murphy show, it’s hard not to think of him when reading this script. No other writer/producer/director has done as much for the positive representation of the queer community on television, and without Ryan Murphy, I don’t think there’d be a Glamorous. What’s exciting about this project is it’s not just Marco being gay and more traditional characters surrounding him. Most of the other characters (in fact, all of the male characters in the show) are gay. Truly, it’s like 50 shades of gay: Marco is the fabulous gay; Chad is the ambitious alpha gay, with a personality and wardrobe that would seem more at home on Wall Street than the beauty industry; BEN is the nerdy gay who has a crush on Marco but is too shy to act on it; LAWRENCE (50s) is the older gay, the head of Product Development who’s happily married; and Dizmal is like the younger version of Billy Porter’s Pray Tell in Pose. They come from different paths and generations, and together they tell a strong, diverse, story of what it’s like to be a gay man in 2019. And that’s a lot of things, believe me.

The pilot is reminiscent of The Carrie Diaries, which also aired on The CW a few years ago. It’s a coming-of-age story full of cultural references, both light-hearted and inspirational. And it’s full of possibilities from the get-go, especially in the romance department. Will Marco sleep with his enemy Chad, or will he fall into Ben’s arms? Can something happen with Dizmal? These are questions one can rarely ask when it comes to gay characters on other shows.

There are particularly nice moments between Marco and his mother Julia, who share a very close relationship. Madolyn is more of a mentor figure, a bit like Melora Hardin’s Jacqueline in The Bold Type though there’s a bit more ambiguity with her. She’s not a Devil Wears Prada-kind of boss, but her intentions are also not entirely pure: this canny businesswoman and entrepreneur intends to make Marco her eyes and ears in the company, using him to discover what’s going on behind her back. Yes, it’s soapy. And since I haven’t mentioned it yet: it’s also very funny — full of punchlines and bitchy comments. That’s what we are here for too! You’ll also get the chance to admire Marco shaking his booty on stage. But enough said!

 

FINAL RECOMMENDATION: Glamorous may have to fight with Riverdale‘s spin-off Katy Keene for a spot on The CW, since they’re both set in the fashion/beauty industry (andGlamorous is probably not the safer option of the two). But if the stars align, it could become a critically-acclaimed, award-winning show for The CW. I have a feeling that no matter what happens with the network, this show is too good to not to find its way to viewers, whether it’s on traditional TV or on streaming. And the LGBTQ+ community needs it more than ever!

 

OVERALL PROJECT SCORE:

[  ] PASS
[  ] CONSIDER
[ X ] RECOMMEND

Tommy (CBS) pilot preview: Edie Falco is great, but is she enough?

SERIES TITLE: Tommy (aka Nancy)
NETWORK: CBS
GENRE: Cop Drama

LOGLINE: When Abigail Thomas, a former high-ranking NYPD officer, becomes the first female Chief of Police for Los Angeles, she uses her unflinching honesty and hardball tactics to navigate the social, political, and national security issues that converge with enforcing the law…

Pilot Cast: Edie Falco (The Sopranos, Nurse Jackie, The Menendez Murders), Michael Chernus (Orange is the New Black, Mercy), Russell G. Jones (The Americans, Godless), Adelaide Clemens (Watchmen, Rectify), Olivia Lucy Phillip
Series Creators: Paul Attanasio (Bull, Homicide, House, Quiz Show, Sphere).
Pilot Director: Kate Dennis (The Handmaid’s Tale, Secrets & Lies)
Producers: Paul Attanasio, Steven Spielberg, Darryl Frank & Justin Falvey.

Studios: CBS Television Studios & Amblin Television.

Ever wonder how TV executives wade through the dozens of pilot scripts they’re pitched each year? They have staff script readers, who provide what’s called “Script Coverage,” an executive summary and a recommendation for each script. Now you too can preview some of the season’s most buzzed about pilots and find out whether we’d recommend them for pickup. Note that all opinions are our own, and all plot, casting and other creative details described here are subject to change.

 

  

You’ll Like It If You Already Like: Madam Secretary, Bull…

Likely Timeslot: Sunday night might be the right way to go. It will skew old anyway.

 

WRITTEN BY: Paul Attanasio.

PAGECOUNT: 62 pages

DRAFT: “In Dreams Begin Responsibility” Revised network draft 02/1/19

BACKGROUND: In its first pilot season without longtime chief Les Moonves at the helm, is CBS is finally ready to give a chance to projects that are more female-driven. Tommyis one of this year’s contenders that would appear to fit the bill, but just because it’s on the development slate doesn’t necessarily mean the network has turned a new leaf. Inspired in part by a real-life surge in the number of female police chiefs (LA County alone had a record seven last year), the network developed two female-led cop projects last year: Chiefs, starring Jorja Fox, Alana De La Garza and Aunjanue Ellis as (you guessed it) three female police chiefs, and a Cagney & Lacey reboot starring Grey’s Anatomy‘s Sarah Drew. In the end, neither project made the cut. (The Magnum, PI reboot did). Will Tommy succeed where those projects failed? Read on…

 

SCRIPT SYNOPSIS: We open on MARIA DE ANGELES (20’s) picking up her ten year-old daughter MADISON from school. LAPD and ICE are both watching her, but just when ICE is about to move in, LAPD officer ADAM REED (30) breaks Maria’s taillight, putting her under arrest before ICE can get to her. The following day, we are introduced to ABIGAIL THOMAS (known as TOMMY), 48, soon to be the next Chief of Police for the City of Los Angeles. Tommy takes the arrested woman’s young daughter into her protection, housing her with her own grown daughter, KATE WELCH (30). As the strange and mysterious circumstances surrounding the arrest are uncovered, Tommy finds herself in the middle of a political firestorm, facing pressure from both inside and outside the department.

COMMENTS: Tommy may be the perfect example of a project that doesn’t sound particularly compelling until someone great signs on to star. That’s not to say that having Edie Falco attached sudddenly makes Tommy my top pilot pick for the season — not by a long shot — but her involvement helps. Simply put, she has what it takes to singlehandedly increase any project’s chances of survival. The only person to have earned an Emmy Award for Best Actress in both the drama and comedy categories, Falco is beloved for her portrayal of Carmela Soprano in HBO’s groundbreaking series The Sopranos and for her nuanced performance in Showtime’s Nurse Jackie. I don’t know whether her role in this project was written with her in mind, but it’s hard to imagine any other actor being a better fit.

With a New Yorker’s gift for being tough and sarcastic while still remaining likable, Tommy loves being a cop more than anything. Her dedication to her work, however, has clearly taken a toll on her personal life, where she’s been a less-than-stellar wife and mother. Moving to Los Angeles for work, she’s geographically closer to her daughter Kate and her grandchildren, and it might be time to make amends. Also living in LA is Tommy’s ex-husband, who’s an actor and a totally charming human being. They have an easy intimacy and have become close friends over time. These two relationships form solid ground for more serialized storylines. Tommy herself is an interesting character and an unusual lead: she’s a woman of a certain age, a lesbian, and is considered as a “feminist icon” by many.

So, as you can see: Tommy is a lot more ambitious than your typical network procedural. And although my personal interest in the pilot’s investigation waned along the way, it ends up being more ambiguous and complex than it appears at the beginning. And clearly Tommy is a complex character. Is that enough to carry a show that will inevitably fall into the more generic “case of the week” formula? To be honest, I’m not sure. Also of concern in the pilot script are the office politics and hierarchy of it all, which I found cumbersome and confusing.

 

FINAL RECOMMENDATION: Tommy could become an important asset for CBS, which is in need of more strong female-driven programming. And it’s hard to envision anyone better than Edie Falco playing the complex, titular character. Still, this one is not a slam-dunk. My interest in the procedural part of the pilot script waned along the way, and the jumble of supporting characters were just that. In short, I’m not convinced this project has what it takes to retain a network audience. CBS may have better options… 

 

OVERALL PROJECT SCORE:

[  ] PASS
X ] CONSIDER
 ] RECOMMEND

Prism (NBC) pilot preview: Legally Good

SERIES TITLE: Prism
NETWORK: NBC
GENRE: Pyschological Legal Thriller Drama

LOGLINE: a provocative exploration of a murder trial in which every episode is told through the perspective of a different key person involved. Each new version of the facts ratchets up the mystery and the suspense, calling into question everything we have seen so far and asking is the right person on trial? Driven by an ensemble of complicated characters, the show lets the audience ask if truth matters less than who can tell the most compelling story…

Pilot Cast: Malin Akerman (Billions, Trophy Wife, 27 Dresses), Mykelti Williamson (Chicago PD, Fences, Lethal Weapon), Ramon Rodriguez (The Affair, Iron Fist), Sara Rue (Mom, Popular), Brooke Smith (Grey’s Anatomy), David Alpay (The Tudors), Chloe Wepper
Series Creators: Daniel Barnz (Cake, Beastly, Won’t Back Down).
Pilot Director: Daniel Barnz.
Producers: Daniel Barnz, Ben BarnzCarol Mendelsohn (CSI, Melrose Place) & Julie Weitz (Game of Silence).

Studios: Universal Television, We’re Not Brothers Productions & Carol Mendelsohn Prods.

Ever wonder how TV executives wade through the dozens of pilot scripts they’re pitched each year? They have staff script readers, who provide what’s called “Script Coverage,” an executive summary and a recommendation for each script. Now you too can preview some of the season’s most buzzed about pilots and find out whether we’d recommend them for pickup. Note that all opinions are our own, and all plot, casting and other creative details described here are subject to change.

 

   

You’ll Like It If You Already Like: Damages, The Affair, The Good Wife

Likely Timeslot: Tough One. Midseason.

 

WRITTEN BY: Daniel Barnz.

PAGECOUNT: 61 pages

DRAFT: First network draft 12/9/18

BACKGROUND:  Packed with a little bit of everything, NBC’s schedule isn’t lacking much these days. As a consequence, they haven’t ordered many pilots this year. The one thing they don’t have on the air right now is a pure legal drama. Ever since Chicago Justicefailed to click with audiences back in 2017, they haven’t tried another. Two pilots are vying to be the project that reverses that trend this year: Bluff City Law, which seems pretty straight-forward on paper, and Prism, which looks more complex. It’ll be interesting to see which way NBC goes: safe, risky, or another year without.

 

SCRIPT SYNOPSIS:  RACHEL LEWIS (40s), an Erin Brockovich-esque defense attorney in Phoenix, Arizona, prepares for a high profile murder case. The case in question is the murder of prominent local TV host, JESSICA WREN (40s), who was stabbed and killed in a parking lot. Rachel’s client is the suspect, MICHAEL JAMISON (20s), who was seen running from the crime scene just after the murder occurred. Michael is poor and uneducated, and Rachel has devoted her life to helping innocent people in his situation. On the other side is prosecutor EDUARDO GUATY (40s), an old friend of Rachel’s from law school. During their first courthouse session with JUDGE HENLEY (50s), both Rachel and Guaty are surprised to see Judge Henley introduce Jessica Wren’s bloodied scarf into evidence, sent from an anonymous source straight to the court because (as the accompanying note reads) the cops “always screw it up.” In the first hearing with a jury present, Guaty anticipates Rachel’s opening statement, leaving her blindsided with nothing to present. In search of a new angle, she delays her opener until the next morning and enlists the help of her journalist friend ALEXIS, who is covering the trial. Sneaking a peek at Alexis’ phone, she clocks the name WES WILLIAMS, Jessica’s producing partner. Rachel learns Wes himself is under investigation for sexual assault. She has her new angle/suspect…

COMMENTS: The script opens with a quote from essayist Anaïs Nin “We don’t see things as they are, we see them as we are” followed by a series of weird and intense dreamlike images, including a blood-stained glove and a knife falling in slow-mo…. It’s a hell of a way to set the mood. Then an eye opens and we’re in bed with… our heroine of the week, who’s just waking up from a vivid nightmare. Each episode will be told from the perspective of someone different: the accused, the defense attorney, the prosecutor, the judge, jury members, witnesses, etc. That’s the concept. Like Showtime’s The AffairPrism is using the plot device that’s become known as “The Rashomon Effect,” named after Akira Kurosawa’s 1950 Japanese period psychological thriller Rashomon, which involves various characters providing sometimes contradictory interpretations of the same incident. If picked up, we should get 13 episodes from this same case in season one, before moving on to a new case if there’s a second season.

Exploring a murder trial in this way seems particularly timely given the current zeitgeisty anxiety about fake news and what’s true and what’s not. It’s certainly ambitious, and the pilot script succeeds in managing to both entertain and be provocative. The series is set in Phoenix, Arizona and the heat is almost a character in and of itself, adding a little something to the already stifling atmosphere at the courthouse. The title Prism refers to the courthouse which is said to look like a giant prism — a steel and glass behemoth. Also unsual, the show’s writer/creator is slated to direct the pilot. You can tell from the way it’s written that he knows exactly how he wants it to look and how the visuals will fit with the concept.

This same attention to detail is evident in the characters — especially Rachel, the pilot episode’s focus. As written, she’s a force of nature: brilliant, ruthless and empathetic at the same time. I’m not surprised Malin Akerman, one of the most sought-after actresses this pilot season, chose Prism. She’s a compelling character who gets even more interesting when we discover her tragic past. Could she be mentally ill? She’s definitely quirky, which leads to some weird moments. You know who she makes me think of, just a bit? The Good Wife‘s Elsbeth Tasioni. To be honest, I’m already sad she won’t be at the center of every episode, which could well end up being the flaw to the show’s structure. The other character that stands out initially is hard-hitting prosecutor Eduarto Guaty. His history with Rachel makes for a great dynamic, as they’re forced to set their friendship aside — at least in the courtroom.

 

FINAL RECOMMENDATION: Prism is not your typical legal show, nor is it typical network fare. It has a strong cable-feel and it’s hard to figure a timeslot on NBC where it’s likely to grab the large audience needed to survive on broadcast. I wonder if Universal might do better shopping it to a streaming platform, where it could attract a smaller but devoted fanbase and stay on for a few years. That being said, it may be one of those shows that’s worth the risk and if one network can take it these days, it’s NBC.

 

OVERALL PROJECT SCORE:

[  ] PASS
X ] CONSIDER
 ] RECOMMEND

 

NYPD Blue (ABC) pilot preview: more than a reboot, a family affair

SERIES TITLE: NYPD Blue
NETWORK: ABC
GENRE: Cop Drama

LOGLINE: Andy Sipowicz’s son, Theo, tries to earn his detective shield and work in the 15th squad while investigating his father’s cold case when new information arises. Theo seems to have taken after his father as he too is a hard-drinking, hard-headed and quick-witted cop…

Pilot Cast: Fabien FrankelAlona Tal (Seal TEAM, Supernatural, Veronica Mars), Kim Delaney (NYPD Blue, Army Wives), Bill Brochtrup (NYPD Blue, Major Crimes), Rick Gomez (Band of Brothers, What About Brian), Ashley Thomas (The Night Of, 24: Legacy)…
Series Creators: Matt Olmstead (NYPD Blue, Prison Break, Breakout Kings, Chicago PD) & Nick Wootton (NYPD Blue, Chuck, Scorpion).
Pilot Director: Jesse Bochco (NYPD Blue, Agents of SHIELD, Raising The Bar).
Producers: Dayna Bochco, Jesse Bochco, Matt Olmstead & Nick Wootton.

Studios: 20th Century Fox Television & ABC Studios

Ever wonder how TV executives wade through the dozens of pilot scripts they’re pitched each year? They have staff script readers, who provide what’s called “Script Coverage,” an executive summary and a recommendation for each script. Now you too can preview some of the season’s most buzzed about pilots and find out whether we’d recommend them for pickup. Note that all opinions are our own, and all plot, casting and other creative details described here are subject to change.

 

  

You’ll Like It If You Already Like: NYPD Blue (duh!), SouthLAnd, Law & Order: SVU, Chicago PD

Likely Timeslot: Tuesday at 10, of course! The iconic timeslot on ABC where the original series stayed from the first episode to the last. And nothing really worked there since then…

 

WRITTEN BY: Matt Olmstead & Nick Wootton.

PAGECOUNT: 56 pages

DRAFT: Revised network draft 9/18/18

BACKGROUND: For those unfamililiar with it, the original NYPD Blue first aired in 1993 and is considered by many to be one of best television shows of all time. It was never a ratings juggernaut for ABC but it was a stable player and a critical darling. It won 20 Emmy Awards and 84 nominations over its 12-year run, including best drama series, and was lauded for its realistic portrayal of cops’ lives. It also generated controversy for its use of foul language, partial nudity, and its raw depiction of alcoholism, among other things.

Until Grey’s Anatomy broke the record recently, it had been the longest-running ABC prime-time drama. Longevity isn’t the only thing the two series have in common: they’re both soap-like, revolving around the characters’ professional lives intertwined with their personal ones, although Grey’s is lighter in tone where NYPD Blue was grittier and darker — especially compared to other TV series at the time. Both series also survived multiple cast changes with actors leaving and characters dying, although like Meredith Grey, Andy Sipowicz (played by Dennis Franz) stayed central from start to finish, proving to be the glue that held the show together.

NYPD Blue was co-created by Steven Bochco, one of the most important and prolific series creators ever, whose credits include Hill Street BluesL.A. LawDoogie Howser MDMurder One and the short-lived but infamous Cop Rock, a musical cop show. In 1987, he struck a $15M deal with ABC to create 10 series pilots over 10 years, which was unheard of at the time. Before he died last April at the age of 74, Bochco met with the co-writer of this new iteration and gave it his blessing. It stays in the family since Bochco’s son, Jesse (who directed 10 episodes of the original series) is executive producing and directing the pilot. Matt Olmstead and Nick Wootton, the co-creators of the new show, also worked on the original NYPD Blue at the start of their careers, reteaming with Bochco on two of his later series, Brooklyn South and Blind Justice.

Fun fact: this is not the first reboot ordered for NYPD Blue: In 2004, ABC picked-up to pilot NYPD 2069, a futuristic spin-off about an NYPD detective named Alex Franco who is declared brain-dead after an “accident”. Taken off life support, his heart continues beating, and he is cryogenically frozen for 66 years. Awakened in the year 2069 to find his wife dead, his son an aging vegetable, and his grandson a cop, Franco pleads for the right to do what he does best: police work. The pilot starred Josh Hopkins, Anna Gunn, Danny Pino, Kevin Dunn and Giancarlo Esposito, but it failed to win a series order. Go figure.

SCRIPT SYNOPSIS: After 26-year-old police officer THEO SIPOWICZ mishandles an undercover case, he’s kicked off the 30th District’s Narcotics squad. Theo is one of the best detectives on the force, but he drinks a bit too much and can be reckless on the job. He’s also mourning the death of his father ANDY SIPOWICZ of the 15th Precinct, who was murdered in a brothel 2 years ago under mysterious circumstances. After new details surface about Andy’s murder, Theo talks his way into helping the detectives of the 15th: NICOLE LAZARUS, CHRIS GAMBLE and CRAIG PETTIBONE. Ultimately, Theo’s work on his father’s case leads CHIEF ARTHUR FANCY to transfer Theo to the 15th Precinct as a squad detective, where he’s under the supervision of LIEUTENANT DIANE RUSSELL, who made a promise to her dear friend Andy to help Theo get his gold shield when he’s ready. And now he is.

COMMENTS: This new series’ link to the original NYPD Blue is both a blessing and a curse. For those who watched the original series, there’s an instant familiarity (and the opportunity for characters from the original series to return). For new viewers, it’s more challenging, as the writers have to bring them up to speed on who Andy Sipowicz was and what he represented for his colleagues, without being too obvious and boring for those of us who already know. I’m sorry to report that this pilot script struggles to find the right balance. With so much time spent on backstory, there’s simply not enough left to properly introduce most of the new characters. Theo is everywhere, but his co-lead Lazarus stays in his shadow. And the others are in the shadow of his shadow. What this means is Theo had better win the viewer’s hearts from the get-go if ABC wants them to stick around. On the bright side, the producers of the new series seem to understand this, having performed an exhaustive three month casting process before selecting Fabien Frankel for the role.

Here’s the thing with Theo Sipowicz: the creators of this reboot want him to be so much like his father — the same temper, the same struggles — that it can feel at bit insincere. I didn’t feel like he was his own character, but rather a character playing the part of another one. Perhaps that’s his actual psychological state, but it feels risky. The two would have been compared to one another anyway, so why force it? To be fair, the pilot is all about Andy’s murder, so it makes sense that he would be at the center of it. And to the producers credit, his death will not be the core mystery of the series or even the season — it’s solved by the end of the 42-minute episode. Along the way, we’re introduced to Theo and his soon-to-be colleagues in the 15th precinct, who will presumably be more at the heart of subsequent episodes. A little advice to ABC: launch the show with a two-hour premiere so people can have a better taste of what’s to come.

The highlight of the pilot for me is Kim Delaney’s character, Lieutenant Diane Russell. She had a complicated history with the original show: she joined NYPD Blue as a recurring in Season 2 and was a series regular from seasons 3 to 8 before leaving to topline another series for Steven Bochco, Philly, which didn’t last. She then returned as a recurring in the final two seasons. In any case, as one of the original series’ most beloved characters, it’s great to have her here as a mother/mentor figure for Theo. She has the power in the precinct, and having a woman in this position in the reboot makes total sense. Same goes with Bill Brochtrup’s PPA John Irvin. The actor recurred on- and off- during Seasons 2 to 4 before becoming a series regular in Season 5 for the rest of the show’s run. He’s one of those characters who became essential over time. He’s gay, which was quite something in the original show, especially since Andy was initially homophobic but they became friends to the point where he babysat Theo. John can definitely add something to the reboot, although it’s not clear exactly what that will be just yet.

 

FINAL RECOMMENDATION: The original NYPD Blue owes its success to its writers ability to portray the show’s characters as humans who happen to be cops, and the whole gamut of emotions that come with that. That’s a tall order, and the pilot script for this reboot doesn’t quite get us there. The question is: can it/will it ever? Unlike some of the more cynical projects to crop up in recent years, this project is more than just a reboot, it’s a family affair. That should help.

 

OVERALL PROJECT SCORE:

[  ] PASS
X ] CONSIDER
 ] RECOMMEND

Surveillance (CBS) pilot preview: The Sophia Bush Show

SERIES TITLE: Surveillance
NETWORK: CBS
GENRE: Thriller Spy Drama

LOGLINE: Madeline Yardley, the head of communications for the NSA for 13 years, finds her loyalties torn between protecting the government’s secrets and her own when an investigative journalist she met dies unexpectedly in mysterious circumstances…

Pilot Cast: Sophia Bush (Chicago PD, One Tree Hill), Dennis Haysbert (24, The Unit), Matthew Modine (Stranger Things, Weeds, Full Metal Jacket), Catalina Sandino-Moreno (The Affair, The Bridge), Allan Leech (Bohemian RhapsodyDownton Abbey), Raphael Acloque (Tyrant, 24: Legacy), Nick Blood (Agents of SHIELD)…
Series Creators: David C. White (The Bridge, Sons of Liberty).
Pilot Director: Patricia Riggen.
Producers: Matt Reeves (Cloverfield, The Passage, Planet of the Apes), Sophia Bush, Patricia Riggen & David C. White.
Studios: 20th Century Fox Television, CBS Television Studios & 6th & Idaho.

Ever wonder how TV executives wade through the dozens of pilot scripts they’re pitched each year? They have staff script readers, who provide what’s called “Script Coverage,” an executive summary and a recommendation for each script. Now you too can preview some of the season’s most buzzed about pilots and find out whether we’d recommend them for pickup. Note that all opinions are our own, and all plot, casting and other creative details described here are subject to change.

 

   

You’ll Like It If You Already Like: Person of Interest, Scandal, Homeland, 24…

Likely Timeslot: Monday at 9? Thursday at 10?

WRITTEN BY: David C. White

PAGECOUNT: 63 pages

DRAFT: Revised Network Draft, 1/12/19

BACKGROUND: Surveillance was picked up to pilot by CBS back in September 2018, long before the start of traditional pilot season. It was one of the biggest sales of pitch season, and marked a breakthrough in the relationship between CBS and 20th Century FOX Television as the network’s first buy from the outside studio in three years. A different incarnation of the project was originally set up at FOX for development last year, but didn’t make it to pilot stage. Instead, the script was reworked and the studio brought Sophia Bush and Patricia Riggen on board before taking the package out.

The project is a return to television for Sophia Bush, who most recently played Detective Erin Lindsay for four seasons on NBC’s Chicago PD, before exiting in 2017. The set of the cop drama has been described as a tough environment for Bush, who is said to have exited when it was clear that nothing would be done to make things right. In Surveillance, she’s not only the star of the show but also an executive producer. And she may have found a way to send a message or two to her old team through this show and this character.

SCRIPT SYNOPSIS: The pilot opens in a convenience store parking lot, with a man named JACK HERBERT leaving a payphone and returning to his mess of a car. There are laptops, cell phones, legal pads and takeout containers everywhere. We next see him cruising down empty downtown city streets, before approaching a large brick wall… and crashing right into it. The car explodes instantly. Is Jack dead? A surveillance camera filmed the whole scene.

Cut to: a hotel room. Separated from her husband and far away from her two children, this is where our heroine MADDY lives. She’s the director of Strategic Communications for the NSA. She was sleeping but is awakened her phone. She grabs it and our question is answered: Jack Herbert is indeed dead. But Maddy has no idea who’s giving her this information. Her next call is from BARRY, telling her to get to work ASAP. Barry is the NSA Deputy Director, basically her boss, but also her mentor/father figure.

At NSA headquarters, Maddy is welcomed by her close colleague and longtime friend NATALIE. Natalie oversees all active operations at the NSA, and is the first woman to do so. Maddy has a favor to ask of her: trace the call she received a few hours before, off book. Natalie accepts, but not without some hesitation. Maddy goes to the conference room, where Barry and a group of other NSA higher-ups are waiting for her. She knows all of them, except one. THE MAN IN THE RED TIE. His identity and true mission are shrouded in secrecy. They have questions for her about Jack Herbert. Turns out she met him, perhaps more than once, and she’s asked to explain what she knows about him, what he was looking for when he came to her the first time… We’re transported to that moment through a flashback and it’s clear that Maddy is lying to the committee. But why?? What is she hiding?

COMMENTS: As discussed earlier, Surveillance was not originally developed as a vehicle for Sophia Bush, and I can’t help but wonder if she’s the right fit. Part of that may be because I know her from One Tree Hill, where she signed brighter than most of her co-stars, and from the short-lived sitcom Partners, where she proved she could be very funny. And although I’m less familiar with her work on Chicago PD (for which she was also lauded), her character in Surveillance feels very different. For one, she’s described in the script as a woman in her forties. (Bush herself is in her mid-thirties.) In addition, this isn’t just a leading role, the entire show is built her character, with Maddy appearing in nearly every scene of the pilot. That’s a lot to put on Bush in her first go as series lead, but clearly 20th Century FOX & CBS think she’s ready. Let’s hope they’re right.

The first season of the series has a title — “Operation Blackwash” — suggesting there will be one central storyline each year, with most of the cast and characters returning for subsequent seasons, except those who will die. Because this is the kind of show where people die, a lot. And, um, un-die sometimes. This is a big conspiracy thriller, with no holds barred. But as different as that may seem from the typical CBS formula show, it’s not revolutionary, either. At this point, you really can’t make a TV show about the inner workings of a federal institution, whether it be the FBI, the CIA or the NSA, without being compared to what’s been done (and done well) before. Which brings us to Homeland. The Showtime drama is definitely an influence on Surveillance, and there’s a lot of Carrie Mathison in Madeline Yardley, not only because she’s a woman in a world of powerful men — which is resonant with Bush’s own story — but also because she’s basically the same character: brilliant, determined, complex, and married to her job. She also has a messy private life — is an affair going on there? — and the requisite stress that comes with a job where a single mistake can lead to death and destruction.

The pilot plays the suspense card very well, revealing plenty of tantalizing details along the way. This isn’t Scandal — it’s not an over-the-top spectacle with characters over-reacting to everything — but Maddy’s job is pretty similar to Olivia Pope’s: she fixes problems, she sometimes hides the truth for the greater good, she manipulates, she bargains, and she threatens. This is serious stuff, but it’s also quite exciting. That it manages this may be the script’s greatest achievement. The NSA is about people working behind desks, making phone calls, watching, listening, and taking meetings, but the script’s fast pace compensates for that, and then some.

The show’s secondary characters stay mostly in Maddy’s shadow in the pilot script, but that’s not a problem at this point. If the show gets picked up to a full network-sized season, they’ll definitely need to be developed in later episodes to be more than just pawns in this wicked game but also actual human beings with their own stories.

FINAL RECOMMENDATION: Surveillance is a little risky, but it’s too good a script not to try. It’s timely and captivating, and has the potential to do for CBS what The Good Wifeand Person Of Interest have done in seasons past. Poor execution or an unconvincing performance from Sophia Bush could quickly turn it into something less compelling but let’s be optimistic!

 

OVERALL PROJECT SCORE:

[  ] PASS
  ] CONSIDER
X ] RECOMMEND

 

Snowpiercer (TNT/Netflix) pilot preview: Welcome aboard, voyagers!

SERIES TITLE: Snowpiercer, “All That Remains
NETWORK: TNT/Netflix
GENRE: Futuristic Thriller Drama

LOGLINE: Seven years after the world has become a frozen wasteland, the remnants of humanity inhabit a gigantic, perpetually moving train that circles the globe. The show questions class warfare, social injustice and the politics of survival…

Pilot Cast: Jennifer Connelly, Daveed Diggs, Susan Park, Mickey Sumner, Iddo Goldberg, Timothy V. Murphy, Sasha Frolova, Katie McGuinness, Alison Wright, Annalise Basso, Sam Otto, Sheila Vand…
Series Creators: Josh Friedman (The Sarah Connor Chronicles, War of the Worlds, Emerald City, Avatar 2).
Pilot Director: Scott Derrickson (Doctor StrangeThe Day The Earth Stood Still), reshoots by James Hawes (The Alienist, Black Mirror).
Producers: Josh Friedman, Marty Adelstein, Becky Clements, Bong Joon-ho, Park Chan-wook, Lee Tae-hun & Dooho Choi.
Studios: Tomorrow Studios, ITV Studios, Studio T. &  CJ Entertainment

Ever wonder how TV executives wade through the dozens of pilot scripts they’re pitched each year? They have staff script readers, who provide what’s called “Script Coverage,” an executive summary and a recommendation for each script. Now you too can preview some of the season’s most buzzed about pilots and find out whether we’d recommend them for pickup. Note that all opinions are our own, and all plot, casting and other creative details described here are subject to change.

 

   

 

WRITTEN BY: Josh Friedman

PAGECOUNT: 72 pages

DRAFT: 7/7/16

BACKGROUND: Based on the French graphic novel Le Transperceneige by Jacques Lob, Benjamin Legrand and Jean-Marc Rochette (which was previously adapted by Bong Joon-ho for his acclaimed 2013 movie starring Chris Evans, Tilda Swinton & Octavia Spencer), Snowpiercer the TV series has a bit of a tortured history. Having been in development for almost four years, the show has faced a number of delays arising from creative differences between the series’ creative teams and the network. Not a good sign if you see the glass half-empty, but you could also see it half-full: it may just mean they’re taking great care with the property.

About that tortured history: Original writer and showrunner Josh Friedman was fired in January 2018, and replaced a month later by Graeme Manson (Orphan Black). Reshoots of the pilot were ordered, but the original director Scott Derrickson refused to proceed, saying: “The 72-page Snowpiercer TV pilot script by [Josh Friedman] is the best I’ve ever read. The feature-length pilot I made from that script may be my best work. The new showrunner has a radically different vision for the show. I am forgoing my option to direct the extreme reshoots.” James Hawes joined the series in July 2018 as an executive producer and a director to oversee the reshoots. A few days later, Netflix picked up the rights to stream the series outside of the United States and China. The show is currently slated to start airing on TNT in the summer 2019.

Please note that this review is based on the original version of the pilot script, before the rewriting and the reshoots. I don’t know what’s been changed, although I do have my ideas.

SCRIPT SYNOPSIS: We open on the image of a snowstorm and text on the screen explaining what happened on planet earth before it became frozen. We quickly see the massive snowpiercer train, which is leaving a frozen city in the midst of the storm. Then we look into the eye of a cow, which has the number 18 written on its forehead. She’s with a dozen of other cows. Welcome now to the tail section of the train, a place of starvation and hopelessness. We follow a little boy named Fergus, who’s playing with rats, and a man named Layton, who may or may not be his father. A woman’s voice is heard over the loudspeaker, wishing the passengers good morning on behalf of Wilford Industries and Transport.

We’re introduced to five workers who are stripping off their filthy work clothes under the supervision of security guards known as “The Brakemen.” Their skin is covered with industrial waste. They enter the tail section, where they’re reunited with their families. Fergus hugs one of them: it’s his father, Ian. We then meet the Anderson family: Jack, Lilah and their teenage daughter LJ. They’re eating breakfast peacefully, in a pod that looks nicer than the tail section. Once he’s done eating, Jack joins the agricultural supply car, through a railed transportation tunnel. Turns out he’s a farm worker, soon to feed our cow number 18. Meanwhile, Lilah goes to her job at a high-end nail salon. A client is waiting for her, and it’s Melanie Cavill, the voice of the train announcements. She’s a member of the train’s First Class and she’s fascinated with the other half.

It’s naptime in the Brakemen’s car, but two of them, Bess Till and John Osweiler, are awake. They’re partners and they seem close. They move toward the prison car where Pixi Aariak has lived for 3 years. She’s screaming, agitated. Till and Osweiler help her on her way out. After a much-needed shower, Pixi is sent to the Nightcar where’s she welcomed by Miss Audrey with warmth and kindness. A few minutes later, the passengers are warned to brace for impact. A large iceslide is blocking the track, and the train will have to smash its way through.

COMMENTS: So does Snowpiercer live up to the hype? Is it in fact the best pilot script I’ve ever read? While I wouldn’t go that far, one can’t help but marvel at this new world and each section of the train as its revealed. The wide shots of the ice-covered landscape should be magnificient, and I can’t wait to see what the Aquarium Car looks like (complete with a sushi bar!). It’s a rich universe, and writer Josh Friedman makes the best of it at a good pace. You get enough time to enjoy the different atmospheres you’re brought into — to really feel them — but it’s never boring. There’s a good balance between the every day life of the train and the extraordinary events that occur. Spoiler alert: at one point, someone is murdered and one of the first ongoing stories will be about the investigation that ensues. That may not sound particularly original, but in this context, with these characters, it’s interesting.

The characters themselves are also introduced in a compelling way, with enough time given that we learn in a nutshell who they are, and what their role is in this giant puzzle. Some of them are instantly appealing, while others will need a little a more time, but they all have something going for them, whether they’re coming from the tail section or first class. A few of them are mysterious and others are not who you think they are. Like the movie, Snowpiercer the TV series is about conflicting human impulses, social organization, disparities and power. It’s not a highly political show at the outset, but it’s poised to become one.

You can tell a lot of effort has been made to honor the source material. The series format gives more time to explore areas that were only hinted at in the movie, and it’s pretty captivating. It also answers a few questions, like: how do they make love in the tail section? Can they? (Answer: they do it quietly in a dark corner.) The show clearly wants to be smart entertainment, but it’s also dark, and at times very adult. I suspect that’s the part TNT tried to soften, to ensure it can reach a wider audience. At one point we’re introduced to a group called “the hand”, which is a “family” of adults engaged in one big polyamourous relationship. We meet them in a scene that’s described as “pastoral, like Monet’s Le déjeuner sur l’herbe“. How great does that sound? But unless those characters are supposed to stay in the background, I wouldn’t get too attached to them. I can’t find their names in the list of the regular characters, so they may not have made the cut.

FINAL RECOMMENDATION: Ambitious, smart and at times dark, Snowpiercer is the type of show that runs the risk of being lost in the endless shuffle of Peak TV. And if it were only TNT airing it, I’d be genuinely worried, but with Netflix in the loop, there’s a good chance it will reach the wide audience it deserves. The pilot script is everything you want from a futuristic, post-apocalyptic thriller. Is it in the right hands? Will this train go in the right direction? Only time will tell, but here’s hoping it’s not just the pilot… and that the budget is as ambitious as the storytelling!

 

OVERALL PROJECT SCORE:

[  ] PASS
  ] CONSIDER
X ] RECOMMEND